BOOK REVIEW REQUESTED:
I wasn’t certain what to make of this story. It was thrown together and tended to have a rambling feel; as if the author had a thousand ideas to impart and decided to throw them all into a single story. Additionally, the writing style reminded me of a first grader who is learning writing mechanics but hasn’t quite mastered them. Once more, this is an example of why authors, self-publishing, should never release a book prior to having it professionally edited.
There were extensive errors in formatting and written mechanics, as well as general errors in word usage, and more.
1. The paragraphs were not indented, so even though it was possible to determine where one thought ended and another began because of the indentation at the end of the sentence, proper formatting would have made it less a struggle to read.
2. There were numerous errors in mechanics including:
‘What are you waiting for? Run, run as fast as you can!’ the Tiny Bee said to herself.
‘Good morning!’ the fox Vulpes vulpes spoke again in a sad voice and rearing its ginger head out of the burrow.
This should have been formatted (corrected for punctuation, formatting, flow, word usage, etc.):
“Good morning,” a grumpy voice greeted the tiny bee, just as she was about to flee.
What are you waiting for? Run, run as fast as you can! The tiny bee said to herself.
“Good morning,” the fox, Vulpes vulpes, spoke again in a sad voice, rearing its ginger from its burrow.
3. There was repetition of some words (i.e. Meles meles, Vulpes vulpes) for which I could not make sense. I’m assuming these were names, however only the first word is capitalized. If names, both would be capitalized (?).
4. Mistakes in spelling. For example:
9. Parts of the story are taken from classic stories, such as the Lion and the Mouse.
Who I Am...
My name is Barbara Woster. I am an author, business owner, and an educator. Writing is my passion, but I also enjoy providing insight for aspiring authors. Additionally, I review work by other writers upon request. To have your book reviewed, simply get in touch.